I also would've enjoyed some more Matt, really. Their relationship, for a little bit, whether he was really that protective brother when he found out about Jesse, or was it a spontaneous burst of brotherly love that is so surprising it's overwhelming? The first chapter caught me a bit off too. As in, too quick into the story without the back story. Of course, every first chapter needs that hitch to catch readers on the spot, but not enough of the characters was known before hand to understand how they transformed. Like, to a regular reader, Jesse might've always loved Alexa in his own way, in a way she didn't recognize. Just so the transformation into the Jesse she loved in the end is more ... defined, might be a good word for it?

I do like your plot though, and your amazing use of foreshadow. It is my favorite technique in writing, ever xD In the first few chapters you mentioned something really briefly and quickly, and I knew immedietly from then where it was going to end xD I just LOVE to pick up on foreshadow, and all your chapters have it, I adore that you use it so well

You're epilogue or last chapter was also quite excellent. There is literally nothing about that chapter I'd even consider changing, or asking you to fix or could probably get better. It was a most beautiful ending in a very beautiful style. And I actually quite liked the transition from the chapter before, that some might take as unfinished, while I took it as the perfect time to cut it off. I thought it was marvelous too


seriously, I love to rant xD *blows kisses your way* Thanks for putting up with me, lol!